What do you think of this scene from my story I wrote? (WARNING-GRAPHIC)?

Very good, your descriptions were okay, but you seemed to mostly focus on describing the 'touch' sense. You never really went into detail about what this character saw, or what he heard or what he smelled all that much. Good similes, maybe a little too much similes? But great word choice. very good overall, and even though I can see that you worked hard to get all the descriptiveness in, you need a little bit work on describing all the senses a little bit more. I might be very picky, but hey, at least I'm being honest :) Very good, you have a lot of potential. Keep up the good work, and I might see your name on a cover of a book someday :)